All Comments on 'Suspicion: Healing'

So, little ole cheating slut Kathy lives happily ever after. Bullshit. Best ending possible was to discover (too late) that good ole Paul had AIDs, which she contracted also, and they both die in agony within a month of each other. And, oh, she dies alone since everyone hates her. Fucking wimp author.

I'm glad Paul found love again.

But that bloody whore Kathy? She did not pay for her cheating. She gave up her family for her lover. She did not sacrifice anything in her life yet she got the fairytale happy ending. And to top it off Paul extended an invite for her to attend the celebration? Hell No!!!!!! She got off too easy. She was not accountable for her actions.

the daughter remaining in close contact with her mother, considering what the woman had done. This whole "your mother loves you," business is false, since in the story, the daughter states that the woman left the family for another man. It is wrong.

shuttelpilot

Paul should of contacted AIDS from Kathy who got it from a stripper at her bride shower.

humiliation for the wannabe cucks. Graphic creampie eating, sloppy seconds, entire town knows of his cuckhood, then the WBC might be satisfied. They need ample doses of degradation in order to spank.

I liked it that he could wish his ex-wife well.

Hanging on to bitterness just makes unhappiness.

They are all all happier for it.

As commented on, Kathy really broke it off in her family. So, why should she live happily ever after? At a bare minimum there should of been no friendship between him and her (and no contact). He should of found a happier life without ever seeing her again. (And, if Kathy ended up miserable, that would be "gravy" to the story).

Let's see. Kathy cuckolds him, gives up kids for a man willing to destroy a family, and Kathy lives happily ever after. BULLSHIT. Really quite pathetic a tale.

Your version was better than the whole other story

Much better ending than the original. It was nice to see you actually give the man some dignity compared to what whiteone did. His goofy way of speaking with his teenage children was a little awkward to envision, I just can't see teenagers going along with those antics as much as his children did, but I was able to just shrug that off. Overall it was a very nice read with some minor disappointment because of Kathy's callous treatment toward her former family not coming back to bite her in anyway -- but that's life and revenge and karma rarely happen in real life.

I really loved this story! I liked it MUCH better that the original by Whiteone Redone. His ending was rather sad. The husband deserved to be happy again after being dumped on by his oh-so-loving wife. The only quibble I have with it is that Kathy did not get what she deserved.

I think this is my favorite ending to this story, I think I've read 4 now. I would have enjoyed it more if the 1st wife had suffered a little more, I wouldn't have been as warm to her when she crashed the wedding party. I can't believe that the kids would have been as forgiving, and believe that it would have been a good touch if they had responded with a little more anger to someone who after all cheated them as well as their dad. It also would have been nice if her second marriage didn't work out, as someone said, fantasy doesn't usually work out in the end. Still, he's moved on and has a new wife who is stronger and more loyal than his first. As they say the best revenge is a life well lived. Great job.

It was a little long and I lost interest about half way through. I continued reading, to see if there was any regret on Kathy's part and to see what type of emotional effects the divorce had on Paul. Paul's character was a bit of a stretch. I suppose there are some really strong people out there that when faced with such a traumatic experience don't really have any long lasting emotional effects. I've seen people remarry after emotional divorces but still seem to have commitment issues. That is, they are more detached in the second marriage. Kind of an unconscious self protection mechanism. I realize he was hurt and didn't feel like dating for a couple years but emotional wounds such as these are often character changing events where the character never reverts to the previous personality. Not without counseling, anyway. It was a nice story with very nice characters (especially the kids) in a very nice settings. Even the characters that committed adultery for six months are forgiven and portrayed as nice people but just a little anticlimatic for me. Especially, with such an emotionally traumatic event that this story had derived from. Thank you

...and not particularly well written, at least as far vas the repartee between children and adults.maybe English kids speak like this but not American teens.Or tweens.PG story on erotic story site.Sure.Pistolpackinpete

Why do these authors allways try to make every one a nice person. She wasn't a nice person she cheated on him for 6 months and then left him and the kids.She was a self-centered selfish person.

You have got to be kidding!!!

I enjoyed the other conclusions, but felt they were each a stretch. This was beautifully written and far more real. The reader knew the ending could have gone the other way for a sadder ending, but it still would've stayed true to reality. GREAT JOB! - Budd

I thought this was a beautifully written story that could just as easily be classified as a stand alone romantic story rather than a sequal,but however you clasify it,it's a very well written story.

60 year old George

This is a well-planned, well-written story. I liked it a lot.

A life as it should be lived.No wimp here.Husband or wife,cheaters should never win in the end.

Far,far better ending. Living well

is the best revenge.

His ex got the boot and he got the doll! This IS how life balances out everything. Being a cuckold is a losing situation and no Man ought to play that game!! Have your cake and eat it too! Teach the bitch ex wife a lesson, but take your pound of flesh. No one should ever put up with a real bitching out like our hero had to. And I'd have stepped on the visitation hard in the beginning so as to cause momma a lot of pain; and deservedly so!

there is ten women to every man and they are ready and willing to make a good man happy.writers stop making a cheating whore look like she is the only thing that can make him happy.there are women who go thru the newspaper posting of divorces to find men to see.

try to hard to make you understand the feeling of the female spouse who cheat.this woman was a selfish and sick woman.she did leave her kids and her hubby.she wasn't thinking as an adult,she was acting like inmature person trying to live a fanasy.why would you let your daughter be around the whore and her lover.kids are smarter than adult sometime.

I almost cried. You have a great talent for writing likable characters, making the reader want to see them happy. You also did very well in making us believe that they are indeed happy.

It was good.

I don't see any problems or big shortcommings.

A lot of your harder critics seemed to contradict even themselves. "A man with such good graces cannot invite her to the wedding....wimps saga"

He's not perfect, and not in the best of graces, which is exactally why she wasn't givn any invitation. That's what I love, Paul has depth to him as a character. There is much realism. Guys CAN be like the stereo-typical "victim of a cheating spouse". It's not always a woman. In fact, its 50/50. Gender has nothing to do with it. Paul CAN be nice...and be a jerk. He needs to find a balanced comfort between caring enough not to destroy and ruin Kathy, and wimping out and allowing her to beat down his pride. He won't tolerate some actions, but he will use his heart and his brain to try to give the marriage one more try.

Moral of the story: "Soul Mates are a joke".

Marriage and love....those are commitments between two people who trust, care, empathize with one another. Granted, betrayal has the effect of feeling like a soul mate is lost, but love is easily attainable again. And if a spouse will leave to re-kindle his/her old sould mate match, she/he is deluded, and just chose them over you.

Im glad karl wasn't mentioned...a good author knows when NOT to play certain words, or when a mucisian purposely avoids certain notes. Why do we need to have Kathy punished, or watch her character unfold. Realiy just bites....whether she's happy with Karl....(who left her ages ago....seems she loves him more than he does her) she definately isn't the focal point.

She chose to be taken out of the story when she neglected her relations with Paul. The story is about their relationship and how Paul copes. Do you HAVE to follow your heart? No...its obvious Kathy will never be happy with whatever she chooses. Thank God Paul allows her to abandon the family, and still worked towards having the family comfort her (she didn't deserve it.....but why should people need to help reality bite even more?)

Reality is that she had a choice, made it.....and she did it without much empathy....which shows in Paul's less than perfect attitude towards her. But she lives with it, and it does affect others. We have bonds, making them is great, breaking them sucks. Reality bites, sucks, and blows. But still.....you move on and make life work for you. We all have the natural right to be happy....

All of us, from the skank Kathy.....to the overly compassionate Paul. Even if its not YOUR hapy ending. It's still good to try and find one that'll make you happy. ^-^

Your is one ofthe better endings. I was sorry you didn't bring Todd and Lucile into the tale to tie things together.

Enjoyed your tales Thanks

This ending was noy as nearly wimpy as original. (zed)

This is by far, BY FAR, the best ending to Paul's story; & like many of the other commentators, very well written, with good, believable character development. I was somewhat disappointed that Karl & Kathy were able to get off "scot free", but hey, that's just me. I would have liked for Kathy to come to her senses, just about the time that Paul & Heidi got married, too late to reclaim Paul - even if he wanted her back - but just in time to see that Paul was very happy, with a woman who loved him for what he was, and just not settling for second best. Keep up the good work!

Great story with a much better ending than the original tale. Hope for more stories from you in the future.

This is one of the best amalgamations of several chapters or versions of a story that I have read on Lit.com. It is so good, in fact, that it is hard to decide where to begin with my comments.

First of all, the story is NOT too long. The theme of the story was the healing of a good man violated by a self-absorbed slut. The length was essential to adequately convey the healing process and Paul's movement from victim to victor (he won a true love). The character development was compelling and complete.

Secondly, the author did not rush the relationship between Paul and Heidi, as they moved from one level of affection to another. That is likely what would happen in real life, and stories are believable only if they bear some resemblance to real life.

Lastly, the ending was WELL CONSTRUCTED, and made sense in the context of the story. I thought the appearance of Kathie at the reception was gratuitous since, as a reader,I did not give a shit what happened to her. But the author, by having her show up at the end of the story, probably completed the circle and closed the book on the narcissistic bitch. Not a bad element in the ending.

All-in-all, the author melded all of the ingrediants of the prior versions and composed a Lit.com near-masterpiece.

Cheers!

I have read the other endings and liked this very much. As I said in my comment on whiteone_redone's original, Paul is a strong character. Fdkman262 has vividly illustated his efforts to reclaim his life. I do not feel the absence of Kathy dilutes this viewpoint. I think this is an excellent tale, well written, and reflecting a more real-life outcome. Mind you, I'd still torch the bitch!

Paul finds real love and lives happily ever after. Just the type of outcome I usually hope for in fiction.

Although I didnt care much for Kathy, I thought that not mentioning her hardly at all was a great way to go. Having Paul happy is better than having her suffer (or worse yet, having him take her back when her fantasy didnt pan out). By not writing much about the ex it seemed that Paul was truely over her. If he had kept mentioning that she wasnt happy or that reality didnt measure up to the fantasy, it would have seemed like he still cared about her too much (hate is a type of caring). By not knowing or caring what she did, it showed that he was really over her and ready to embrace his new, better, marriage without wondering what might have been.

Im not sure if I could have been as big about it as he was though since I really did dislike Kathy. If she had just dumped him for Karl I could have at least had some respect for her but the way she wanted it all was really annoying.Pauls reaction in this story was better than mine would have been but thats a good thing. I like happy endings (which arent always the same as reconciliations no matter what some authors on this site seem to think) and I like the characters to be better than rl.

Paul seemed like a genuine good guy and I was happy that things ended well for him. For me, ending things well for the good guy is usually more important than seeing the bad guy miserable (not that a little revenge and some 'what goes around comes around' is bad as long as the good guy doesnt let that his/her biterness eat away at them).

Thanks very much for writing.

I agree with the commentator that indicated that this story was too long. The entire sequence of events with Heidi could have been presented in half the pages.

The biggest problem I had was that the Heidi relationship took so long that the Kathy relationship was completely ignored. These two adulterers should not get to just walk off into the sunset; they should not get the happily ever-after treatment. At bare minimum, Karl should have had an accident for injecting himself in another man’s family, but notice that Karl is not even a character in this story!

Our hero goes sulking for a couple years until he finds the right woman. Then our hero finds it in his heart to accept the presence of his cheating ex with such good graces that I wondered why he had not extended her an invitation to the wedding. This story should have been entitled: A wimp’s Saga.

and I am changing my rating practice. I had given a 100 for a well written story especially if the author was new despite the ending. You have clearly demonstrated that you can write a well thought out ending consistent with the beginning premises of the story.

For example, many stories on this site in this category start with the husband being the perfect husband, father and citizen with a good job. Then his wife cheats on him and his family for some excuse or reason. After the nashing of teeth and tearing of cloth associated with disclosure of the affair we get either an unrealistic reconciliation (the so-called happy ending) or the husband spend the rest of life moping for his cheating wife or failed marriage.

What I loved about your story (and it was not too long) is that it walked through Paul's healing process which was very realistic given that one day he had a happy marriage and the next day his wife leaves him for a fantasy lover.

I am also glad that you stayed away from some stupid revenge scenario which would have impacted the kids as well.

Once again, thanks for a mature and realistic story.

SleeplessinMD

Very well done. I had no problems with the length of the story as it allowed the author to develope the characters fully.

This was a well a well thought out conclusion and a very realistic one. The husband waited two years to find a woman. The woman he found had waited ten years to meet a man to spend her years with. This is much closer to real life than all the forced reconciliations we read about.

Both of your submissions have been way above all others.

This was very nicely done with a light touch.

The length of the story was needed. I takes time for a man in this situation to be ready to move on and then it takes more time for a new relationship to mature.

Nice positive ending!

Regards, DJ (Dynamite Jack)

A very good read. I hope to see more stories from you in the future.

Very well written. I hope to see more of you in the future.

Thanks.

between your ending and thecelt's. One reader chided you because you made the story too long in his/her estimation. I personally think you did it exactly right, taking your time to develop a full and complete story in it's own right. Well done. Thank You. Ronnie W.

Thank you ...good read.

Living well is the best revenge. Well done.

Your ending was better than the original author's. Whether it was better than the Celt's ending is a matter of personal preference. I wish you had dealt with what happened to the first wife after the break up.

Boyd

I thought this was an excellent ending to this story. It would be hard to make a choice between this ending and thecelts. I cannot understand though why the one poster felt it necessary to badmouth thecelt like he did.

This is the first 100 I've given any writer. Your story flowed and meshed so well that I was kept interested throughout. I appreciated how you so tastefully handled the entire course of events in his life after his divorce, and the absence of bitterness on his part was a nice take. If he had done or said more toward his ex... I would have objected to that. I'm NOT a reconcilliation person 90% of the time, so I'm glad he moved on without looking back. it showed strength of character on his part, which is something sorely lacking in most of the men on this web site.

I've said over and over that "Loving Wives" on Literotica is a misnomer. They are slut wives, pure and simple, for the most part and the men are the ones who come crawling back to the women who betray them. How unrealistic. Having sex outside the marriage circle is not what most husbands consider "loving," and most recoil vehemently to that sort of betrayal. Thanks for bearing that out in your story.

Et Ceteraman

And while doing so, doing it not only in a entertaining well written fashion but realatively true to life as most of us know it.

The majic wand injecting manly respect back into him for his spouses failing just isn't a normal lifelike reaction that can be sold in every circumstance.

So, each of your efforts thus far have been tidying up marital consequence themes that you felt passionate about. It is satisfing writing with passion isn't it. Well, there is lots of fodder here for you to consider alternate endings to and I hope to see you considering others or one of your own.

Author - you are appreciated in this theme above all others as a measure of balance to the absurdities that offend human sensibilities.

Again thanks - With Very High Regard

as it would in real life. The only thing missing to me was what happened to the frist wife. I would have liked to have seen her get a little more pain and hurt. She sure destoryed the husband for a while. But Otherwise great story.

I like your ending of this story as well as Thecelts. Whiteone's story left some tantalizing threads to pick up and it is fun to read everyone's take on it. You did this very well, and I enjoyed the story. I hope to see more of your work on this site.

Again, nice job.

you could have done it in 3

as Paul said, since he's a one-woman-man, once he chose someone, he loves her deeply,,,, and that included Kathy the cheating former wife,,, but as he said, loving someone deeply in your heart does not mean you will carry a torch for them forever,,,

a decent, trustworthy, good man like the character Paul here deserves --- as even Kathy agrees --- to be happy and Heidi is a person with character integrity that would make him possible for both Paul and her to be happy,,, judging from how Heidi raised her kid alone for 10 years without child support, working two jobs,,, raising a smart, upstanding son all by herself,,,

since Paul is such a decent character, he truly, as he observed at the end, wished Kathy a good, long happy life with her "greatest love",,, Paul KNOWS he IS again deeply happy, having found an anchor as solid as Heidi,,,

We don't really care much about Kathy, as this is not her story,,, her story ended when she made a decision to leave two teens and her husband behind to live out her life with her "greatest love",,, Even if her life's told, it would not make it too interesting, because PAUL IS SUCH a nice person, a person we rather root for:

"I left a very decent man, who loved and cherished me deeply, and left my two teenager --- all very hard to do but a life I could not have gone on with --- to marry my to marry my present husband," etc. just doesn't get people to root for you, however happy you may be with this person you cheated your husband with,,,

I thought that Paul ended up better with Heidi than Kathy. Your last words of him reflecting on Kathy not loving him enough was true. I do think the kids would have had problems with Kathy and cut her out of their lives, which should have been shown here. I did read other's version of chapter 2 and did like their take on Kathy getting the wakeup of what she lost. I would have liked to see more of that here, but even without it I found this was excellent. Thanks

I liked it. The trauma was overcome and Paul did go on to find happiness. Good job, well written.

I won't compare your ending to others as I think yours was very good and you picked your story line for what interested you. More on the ex-wife’s life would have been welcome to maybe make it a more complete story. Your sex scenes were terrific and real like to me. Each person is different in what they like while making love.

Very good writing and story

Thank you

A happy ever after story... to bad real life dosn't turn out that well

Yes, I too like to see where folks are able to move on. This was a well written ending. I agree that I would have liked to see a little more reality from the wife's predicament (sic). I have found that reality is VERY rarely better than the fantasy we concock (sic) for ourselves.

Also, it has been my experience that kids won't be as easy to forgive the cheating parent as you indicate in the story. She (or in some stories he) didn't just cheat on a spouse. In a real sense people are being unfaithful to the entire family. Kids do understand this even we want to lie to ourselves that they don't. Kids are far less forgiving. And they should be. A primary component of love is to protect your loved ones from harm and to see to it that they have a stable environment. That was very much glossed over here.

Looking for more submissions.

Regards,

C

I really don't like those cheating spouse stories where the husband becomes a hermit, never interacting with or moving on after the break-up. I hope that this story will influence other writers to let their husbands or wives continue with their lives after the divorce.

Good story well written ansd much better than what the pathetic walking douche bag MORON the CELT wrote.

still kathy got no pain... and never realized what seh lost. She suffered NOTHING

They say the best revenge is to live well, that's what you showed us in this story. Still, for some reason this story leaves me unsettled. I can't understand a woman that could leave her husband of so many years and her children without a thought. Fantasy is just that, a fantasy. I'm sure the reality wasn't as pretty. She had a good thing and let it go. I wanted to see the consequences of her actions. You didn't give me that.

I've noticed that this was very similar to some of the other versions of Suspicion in that Senor Karl was an old high school flame of Kathy's. Seems to be a common plot twist with the cheating wife's storylines where an otherwise happily married woman decides to "play" with a man she hasn't seen in 10-20 years but knew in high school. Be nice to see a change, but it did fit the story.

And this was well written overall. The husband came across as believable and you ended up hoping he'd get a happy ending, but I think most would agree that you wanted it to be without Kathy. I'll admit that part of me wanted Kathy's second marriage to fall apart since it was not exactly an honest or honorable marriage (since it was formed through 6 months of cheating on Paul.)

Good dialogue, and no major grammar errors

one note is that the plot does start to drag after about the third page. The steps leading up to the divorce go quickly, but then the life after seemed to almost be a second story where the plot was a bit less uncertain. The overall good writing and basic plot redeemed it, but it could be better.

Hope to see more from fkdman in the future.

Mr. Long Poster

(without a username since 3/29/06. :P )