All Comments on 'Swann's Light Ch. 01'

on your first submission. After reading your story, which was really long, I believe you are familiar with writing. You don't write like someone who has wondered all their life if they could write and are putting out their first ever story.

It is a really great story and I look forward to more. You have really done a great job setting up all of the characters including their backgrounds, the story has a legend, and you have lots of action going on. What more does a story need?

Again congratulation on you first submission to Lit. I wish you continued success in 2012.

this story could use a little polishing to improve the flow for your audience, but all of the elements in your story promise a good tale. Keep up the good work!