All Comments on 'Sweet Submissive'

I can't wait for your next chapter!!

She needs to put her mates in there place.

I would love to continue to read this story!

This was great. Keep it coming.

More, more, more, please!!!

For tags, pay attention to who is in the middle of a threesome.

MMF means the men touch.

MFM means the men do not touch.

I got my hopes up. ;) cute. But it isn't MMF.

I'm glad i found this story. You should also tag it as nonhuman. Great job I hope you add to it soon.

I find the constant flipping around between multiple characters' point of view to be really confusing. It is exhausting to read and almost impossible to keep track of. There are, so far, 4 male characters, and you have to do POV with all of them? And then you expect all the masculine pronouns to be clear?

I really think a story should be written in one POV at a time. Some would argue one POV period per story/book. But if you need to switch POV, at least do it in different chapters, or at the very least, different sections, and make the transitions between these sections clear.

There are other ways to build characters and communicate what a character is thinking, what motivates them, etc. besides putting the story in their POV. Maybe explore some of those.

As it is, I'm not continuing your story, not because its a bad story, but because of the ADHD-esque POV jumps together with the rather high number of typos.

Omega's don't have special powers, they are the go-for's and lowest ranking pack members... I really enjoy imaginative and creative writing, but I dislike it when authors try to change certain status quo's.