All Comments on 'Taken at the Gym'

. . . but well-written. I'm not a big nonconsent fan, but when I saw it was written by a fellow Okie, I thought I should give it a look. I hope you'll write more stories . . . perhaps in other categories. Best wishes.

I thought your story was super hot. I hope to read more from you in the future.

Wow... hot, wel written story. Liked the way the guy went down on her and got a taste of her pee as well. It showed he had MADE HER GIVE IN all she had and all her inhibitions.. Keep writing the style. Loved It... Thanks

Here's hoping part two isn't a "clean" version, this ruled total face!

Squirting isn't urine, genius. The story was pretty good until that point, but that ruined it for me. If you want to write about a girl pissing herself, go ahead, but don't put it in the squirting category. Gross.

I really liked the story but only until the end! Disgusting! With a different ending I would have given 5 poins but not like this!

As I read it, it seems like the character's inexperience leads her to believe she's peed, not knowing what squirting feels like. However, there can be only one; I feel it's incorrect to give the story both a 'pee' and a 'squirting' tag

Please write somemore for this story! Is great, hope that they will fall in love with each other!

Hot story. I'd like to see more as well. I want to hear her beg him to fuck her. ;-)

A very good story told well. Very erotic.

Squirting, maybe

A great read. **** Some distracting mistakes prevented a 5 star rating.

" I haven't had to pleasure of hearing you squeal

but she hoped the he would get off faster

Re-reading first, or another person editing, before you submit your story could help.