All Comments on 'Taking Elaine: Day 01'

Finally a story of this caliber, I really hope you post soon, it's so rare that we see a slave master younger than their submissive. I will checking back everyday for the next chapter.

I just wanted to congratulate you on a great first story.

Loved your story!! Awesome twist w/their ages & interesting ending. I can't wait to read more.. Please keep writing these!!

You are a good writer. I'm not sure if I'm enjoying the story or just good technical writing. The magical rape, the savior psycho (who already said folks will manipulate you every which way to sign a contract)and especially the 'i was born to be a worthless slut slave'......all plot features that send me for an emesis bag. Will this story become more than the sum of its parts?

I have to admit that I had to look up "emesis bag". You raise some good points, but I would like to point out that at no time is Elaine ever referred to as "worthless" and I avoid using "slut" except from the mouths of certain characters. Elaine is a woman who has something big missing in her life and she is trying to find it. Keep in mind, too, that these stories are not real and absolute realism is not the intention. Please enjoy it for what it is and if you would like to discuss this deeper, I would be happy to do so, but do not expect any short answers.

I just wanted to let you know I wanted to rate this a 5 but hit the wrong number! I love this so far and I only just finished Day 1! Great writing!

*smiles*

A friend recently recommended your series to me.... And I'm glad he did!

Your characters and storyline are very well thought out and intriguing. And, well, the rape scenes are just fucking hot! *nips her lower lip as she blushes* I am looking forward to reading the rest of this series.

Fantastic read!! Completely hooked

Rarely am I surprised anymore. You Sir surprised me! One chapter in and already addicted. That I have a new treasure throve of stories will be relished!

Damn! I was really enjoying this right up until the anal rape. It wasn't even the " rape" that turned me off but the brutality. I don't think it would have hurt the story any if he just could have been easy on her the first time. It still hurt but my first anal experience was amazing. I don't know any woman who ever ended up enjoying it after some idiot didn't take some care the first time! You might be going for a realistic slavery theme but if he cared enough to steal her from some really scary dude you'd think he would not risk permanent damage to his new toy he went to such great lengths to get. Anal tearing is no joke and boys who break their toys don't deserve them! I hope she escaped and finds a great Dom that deserves her!