All Comments on 'Taking the Jewel from the Bar Home'

5/5 ram

A really good twist.

Thanks

HP

I bet he won't be inviting anymore strangers home anytime soon.

Those were the days. Now you can die from one, Thanks for the read.

because they made for some pretty humorous lines.

i,e, her "ware abouts"

lol

(continuing from the story's punchline): ... and his second thought was - I can imagine the ribbing when word gets round about this: "And her last >known< whereabouts was (cough) refer to Michael for that." and "Did you take down her details while you were at it ???"

Fantastic development of the story line, the quality of content, and the twist at the end is the real kicker. Totally innocently and I swear I have not come across this story before today. :-), I had also published an story on similarly theme on One Night Stands

Keep up the good work boss, and if you choose to continue this saga of Michael and Delilah, all the best,

Regards

Andhravadoo

Larceny, ware bouts, passed instead of past, one lacy bra (who wears two?), ...

Nice story line, but improve your writing and get an editor. It is no fun reading this in its present shape.

A Gentleman never kisses and Tells...even his Sargent! LOL. Short, Sweet, & Hot, 4+ Stars.

Too short, kinda funny but not really, doesn't belong in Loving Wives, and Sergeant (*sp).