by xtorch
I'm really curious as to where you are taking this story. Can't wait for the next chapter. keep up the good work!!
What a creative story. I can definitely say that this is one of the most unique stories I've read in a while. I look forward to reading more.-I
Good, as always. One concern is that this can't be the first time of a young boy fall in love with a girl, who initiated him. The process is too intimate ...
So I'm rereading this story while waiting for the next chapter in Talla's Falling Temple and just have to ask what is "Severe Service" ?
I haven't read any further than chapter 6, but service is having sex. Severe sex would be something like gang rape. Or possibly some one or thing much larger than usual.
Yeah, that was the issue I was faced with.
Would the Temple really do that to its women? Would they use it as a punishment?
Given the choice, I would probably write that bit out of the story if I ever go over it again and want to publish it.