All Comments on 'Tarzan's Release Ch. 02'

i think the storyline would work alot better if the father didnt know she was his daughter and what happened to the friend in the corner

Me tarzan you jane not a bad fantasy. WOrks well here. Like the buildup and the ending good one

Ok I understand if you like to leave your story on cliffhangers that?s cool but you rapped the first story up leaving the impression that it was over with no inkling that there was a continuation leaving your readers disappointed and unsatisfied and as far as the second chapter goes where did the other chick go, she just disappeared and when did he find out who she was and how did they get from the room at the party to his house?

i cant believe someone gave you a 75 on this rubbish! very very disapointing! yes what did happen to the girlfriend in the corner? and how did steve findout catwoman was his daughter? i have really enjoyed reading some of your other work but this was tuly disaterous! why M.V why <tut tut>

think your cutting and pasting went horribly wrong....

What a load of bollocks. One minute she has enticed her father into a bedroom and he is not aware it is his daughter and the next she is asking him to dress up a Santa and calling him daddy..

Continuity and reality are keywords in any story, even in fantasy, and this has neither.

You filp flopped. How do it go from her tricking him into fucking her with out knowing it was her to seemingly like he knew it was her the whole time. And what about the friend?

Unless everyone's crashing at the friends house, and every room has it's own bathroom, isn't it a little weird to treat it like home? And the friend was in the room, but didn't join in... I thought the intent was to fuck Dad without him knowing it was her? Plan fell apart...