All Comments on 'Teardrop Tonya'

Nice 1.Good Job Keeping the suspense

That was fun. Later could be fun too

You sold the story very well.

I would have like to see just a bit more of the dialog between them instead of story breaks when he was telling her things that the women and people in the neighborhood have been saying about her.

I can understand why you didn't, because you had already told the reader those things and you didn't want a repeat. you could have maybe given the "gossip" in more of a hint type dialog between him and his friend then laid it full out when it was between him and her.

sort of a

"You wouldn't believe what they have been saying about her first husband."says Mark glancing from his wife back to Tonya.

"What about him?" I ask without looking away from the sexy view in front of me.

When he tells me, in a whisper so his wife doesn't hear what we're talking about, my eye go from Tonya to him, then back to her in shock!

This may be just my opinion. It was still a very good story!

M.S.Tarot

Different and very sexy. Thanks for sharing.

It is a pity that stories like this one can not have a sequel, can they?

Fantastic stuff! You've created and interesting and believable charcter in Tonya. The setting and scenario feel vey realistic. And the sheer quality of your writing technique is second to none. Thank you for sharing this.

Nickamano