All Comments on 'The Amnesiac Ch. 03'

Very sweet! I'm glad it worked out and ended the way it did. Very sweet!

I'm glad it all worked out for the boys =) This is a really great story (although it might have benefited from another quick edit) and as a lover of sweet endings this is my favorite chapter. So, i hope you keep the good stories coming =D

love a happy ending! Also loved that it was longer! Can't wait to see what you have coming next!

I am so glad you are staying true to your perspective and writing the stories of your heart. Keep posting and I will keep reading and enjoying.

Peace and joy

Shell

This was really good. Loved the ending and can't wait to see what is next

Great story, but I don't see the connection between Patrick and Devin other than the nursing angle. Why did Devin go without sex for the same amount of time that Patrick was in a coma? Did he just fall in love with his patient, not knowing that Patrick would wake up after so long? Seems unreasonable. I expected to read that they knew each other before Patrick's car wreck. It was completely work-related, but it was also unprofessional because Devin had sex with a patient in the hospital. And then Patrick is released 3 weeks later and they just move in together. Totally unrealistic.

however i thought there was some thing missing.? if this was your first attempt at writing i would have said excellent.?

I really enjoyed the story, but I felt like I was missing something. It seemed almost too happy or too perfect, because it was one good thing after another, and there was little to no conflict that the main character had to go through to get his happy ending. I know that probably sounds a little sadistic, but ALL great stories should have some kind of struggle for the main character to overcome. Also I kept having the feeling like Devin was supposed to know Patrick before his accident, but the plot never developed that way, and it was a little weird. I mean how often do you randomly meet a nurce and latch on to him like a leech and start having sex 3 days after you have been in a coma for five years? Sounds very unlikely to me, maybe in your next story develope the plot a little better, and then it should be a kick a$$ story :D

I thought Devin kind of rushed Patrick, he should have let him get well first, it kind of felt like he was taking advantage of his patient. Glad that it all worked out for the better in the end. Your writing skills are wonderfully great and you really know how to make the reader fall for the characters. Great story.