All Comments on 'The Ballad of Zachery Carson Ch. 03'

I have enjoyed reading this story, and am looking forward to the next chapters. I like your style woomanone. I think the details are quite good and believable. Thank you for sharing your talent.

with the western stories. I love them.

Pete

Dad seems to want to separate his daughter from Zachary as quick as possible, but that may be just his manner of speaking and acting... English, you know?

as always.

Only thing I really noticed wrong was when he handed her his Colt. He told her it was a single shot but the description sounds like a single action revolver. A minor thing.

It's very good. I like the use of 'supper' instead of 'lunch' as the midday meal. Evening meals were always dinner in my grandparents' houses. Breakfast, supper, dinner was the daily progression.

Every story like this has the protagonist trying to shoot the "bad guys" out of the saddle. I think the better approach would be to shoot the horse. It's a bigger target and leaving the "bad guy" on foot wouldn't do him any good and would make him more vulnerable!

Aloe Vera is a wonderful natural substance. My family have always used it especially for skin and rotations and minor problems.

But, the good stuff - the gel - is not in the spines it is in the leaves. (basically, you skin the leaves and use the central gel which is between them.)

I would not put it on a gunshot wound unless it was nearly healed.

You are not supposed to use it on a deep cut or an open wound.

You can also make a drink from the gel (or eat it) but you do risk some interesting side-effects.

Great stuff. Great story, thank you.

-Vadar

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