All Comments on 'The BBQ'

Author, crawl back into your hole.

Commenter, toss another salad and smoke a meaty cock - your two favorite pastimes.

Worth a thousand words...4*

With a rowdy crowd such as this it wouldn't have had a happy ending. It was an interesting read, though.

Great story, loved it!

The comment title says it.

Very nice indeed that both Jane and Charlie stay credible characters. Her not getting screwed by them makes the story stronger. Very good ending.

The one thing that would have made the story even stronger would have been a bit of preamble, little stories that defined their characters outside sex. This would have added dimension to the characters and made it even more effective - and exciting. *****

Will start reading some of your other stories.

Well done & thank you again.

This was original and so great! Well written and very erotic! Great job!!

Just Plain Bob could have made this a multi-installment exercise in depravity & dissent. The author still got pretty wild but ultimately decided 'not to go there'. Alas ! I can't deny that it was an entertaining read for what it was but forgive my calloused & jaded imagination wistfully thinking of plot twists cc what should should never be & ultimately never was. ****

Makes you wonder where things would have gone if Dan wasn't such a good guy...

A better than good read. Well written. Enjoyed the unexpected ending.

Shame 5 stars is the highest rating.

Thanks to QuickDay for an excellent suggestion. I share the darker nature expressed by LSD, but the options for ch2-9 are still open! Fingers crossed! I like these characters so far...ALL of them (except the real Emily, but it WAS her Dad!)

5*+

I liked how it was pushing the excitement envelope but didn't overdo it.

But such continuous narration begins to read like an instruction manual instead of a story.

This is a really great story. Full of teasing, titillation, excitement and humour. It certainly brought a smile to my face ......because it actually could happen!

Worth a 5*

Thanks so much for the contribution. While I agree that the writing was a bit like narration, I didn't try to over think the situation. Please ignore and delete the troll comments. They are fools and have probably never written anything worth reading, including their hateful commentary.

But it could have been a lot worse, 3.

Jeez, it was just fine. Better than 98% of the Loving Wives stories. I usually quit within a few paragraphs of starting them. This one was compelling. Not overdone. Stopped when it should. My wife and I both liked it. Like one reader said, "It could happen."

Thanks for the offering.

tasteless

The kind of hot imagination I love

Too obvious and lacks any credibility.

Any guy that whores out his wife can not be trusted. So why do any kind of deal unless it is so cutthroat that the guy is canned.

The loving wives section attract the worst commenters.

It was a good story of how your wife stepped up to help out.

I am hoping you got the contract ok but you need to invite Dan over and let your wife thank him properly for keeping the secret.

This was a nice twist on these two themes and they were woven into a nice, tight story line. Good story, very entertaining.

I agree with the commenter above that it is a refreshing (and more believable) ending that she didn't get gangbanged. But one thing struck me as odd - they took a limo to and from the airport? Holy shit, flying from Australia to the US and not even staying the night?!?

Another 12 year-old fantasy involving yet another LW wife who is too stupid to breathe and a dickless husband who doesn't head the nonsense off at the pass.

The scenario in this story is fairly unlikely but the author makes it feel possible. Entertaining read.

Sorry the most unlikely story ever, no arousal in my panties this time

Very pornographic! Very good!

Great story! Good lead in with "almost" believable story. Great save at the end, kept Jane from getting her ass fucked off! To bad it might have been even better than your Bachelor Party Surprise submission which I also loved.Thank you for using your imagination for story telling instead of the stereo type, cuckold or BTB tired ass story line. You are 1 in 1000!

Thanks for not having her suddenly turn into a gang bang queen as sooooooooo many bad authors do.

Dan's obviously the type of partner / business associate you want to have. Great save on not falling down the gangbang hole.