All Comments on 'The Beginning'

I hope the title is right and it´s just ´the beginning´.

Please continue this very good work.

Very warm and loving story. Keep it up.

One of the better ones regarding first time submissions. I highly suggest proofreading your work or get a volunteer editor on here. You had several misspellings and some bad pronunciation. They weren't bad enough to take away from the story though. Keep up the good work and NEVER rush your stories. Tease is half the fun. Bring on part II!

Definately liked it as well. Continuing this story is a must. I liked the fact that he had deep feelings for her yet cautious; but she knew exactly what she wanted and went forward with it quite casually or matter of factly. Can't wait to read more about them. I love it.

Please tell us more! One of the better first submissions I have seen.

Can't wait for part 2! Excellent beginning!

Thanks for writing!

sexmate

I can't wait to see where this goes!

that this was never continued. Beautifully written, but it demanded to tell more. I rather hope that it had a basis in reality, and is still happening. Maybe...

Unrealistic and full of basic spelling and grammar errors.