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- The Boy at the Beach House
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All Comments on 'The Boy at the Beach House'
by harding
- 20 Comments
Anonymousabout 13 years agoThis story was a pleasure to read. It was lovely to find a plot, with believable characters, and a narrative that left you with a mental image of real life, rather than just a tale of short term gratification. Thoroughly enjoyable, thank you.
Anonymousabout 13 years agowonderful read,carefully and maturely handled..loved it and will hope for more in a similar vein.
The Navigatorabout 13 years agoBeautifully crafted. Captured the feelings of both characters, with tenderness and reality.
Anonymousabout 13 years agoVery nice...great ending...you should consider doing a sequel to this one...Jenni's husband dying before the next Summer...Paul comes back home and they get together...perhaps long-term?
bartermanabout 13 years agosorry am i only one who is confused jenni last saw his mam when she was 17 and she was 10 now jenni is 26 and mark is at college??this mistake spoilt it big time for me
PeterPiperTwoabout 13 years agoYup, noticed the 'age' problem. It's a shame it has made a 5 ster less than a 5 star, but let's just remember what this site is about.
Anonymousabout 13 years agoThis is the dream of every woman .... to take a boy and make him a man, but this story was so much more then just that. This story had feeling and passion, and yes love. Please write more soon! Oh and for the people who got hung up on the math ... GET OVER IT! This is an erotic story site and this was a very erotic story.
MAND70about 13 years agoI love the story - very sexy, well written. Can we have a follow up please?
Scotsman69about 13 years agoDelicious character-building, believable plot, excellent writing. And oh god, the sex...
estragonabout 13 years agoGood story, good local color, good hot sex, and where was Jenni when I was 18? Believable characters, except why did Jenni marry a shit like Mark? She obviously wasn’t pregnant, she’s not trailer trash--what was her motivation (I hate that word, but no other fits)? It’s as if you dragged him in to set up the tryst with Paul, to justify Jenni’s actions. But you don’t need that, and neither does she. She's a wonderful woman who loves to fuck and suck and be sucked, so let her. Clean up the arithmetic on Babs and Paul (no biggie, make Babs a wee bit older, like 26 with a two-year-old baby when Jenni was 10, and the maths work out fine), throw Mark under the bus (or dump him twenty miles out to sea), and let me have my one quibble in an otherwise near-perfect story. “As if emboldened by the presence of his grandfather the screen door slapped back again and Paul returned to the porch.” No, misplaced modifier. The screen door was not emboldened by the presence of his grandfather, Paul was emboldened. Should be: “As if emboldened by the presence of his grandfather, Paul returned to the porch, the screen door slapping back behind him.” Otherwise a total home run!
bartermanabout 13 years agohey i wouldve loved to meet jenni when i was 18,but just because its erotica dosent mean we cant be interstested in the plot,and i hope to read more of your stories
Anonymousabout 13 years agoIf I gathered my info right, Jenni is 7 years older than Paul? So she's 25...why is this Mature?? No doubt, I loved the story, but...25 is mature?
demantoidabout 13 years agoTender, warm, as well as HOT. Very well written.
ILienBagbyover 11 years agoThis is the first of your stories I have come upon, and I loved it. Jennie is a lovely creation, a multi-dimensional person, real, believable, likable. This reader is for sure looking forward to reading more of your work. Thank you....very much.
elrayo41almost 9 years agoCONGRATULATIONS. You can certainly spin a yarn. Excellent pacing, interesting main character/narrator. THANKS FOR SHARING
pmat6 months agoI guess I’m late to the party but this was a great read. I loved the melancholy feel at the end.
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