All Comments on 'The Boys in Blue Ch. 02'

Lots of spelling errors and misuse of nouns, but a great story.

“More seriously though were the injuries you sustained that coursed you to black out.”

“I who is in debited to you”

“has the mussels began to knit back again;” (a mussel is a shellfish)

Use the correct words. As has been pointed out elsewhere, using the wrong words detracts from what are great stories. Otherwise they are good reads.

You have no knowledge of the basics of English writing.

1: A paragraph consists of more than one sentence.

2: Edit your work or have someone with a knowledge of grammar do it for you.

Your story does have some merits but it is extremely annoying trying to follow it with the above errors.

I think this could be a very good story but the spelling and grammatical errors make it hard to follow. I wish I could keep reading it but I lose interest because I get tripped up trying to figure out what you mean most of the time. Best wishes for future stories.

Immediately grabbed my attention.

And never let go.

Shows storytelling talent plus knowledge of the subject matter.

As to the comments about language errors:

it is well within what is acceptable on an amateur site.

Even where there were the few errors,

the meaning was discernible.

I have 8 years post high school education,

yet it was not an issue with me.

The high ratingsfor these two chapters (4.66 and 4.76)

indicate most readers share my viewpoint.

Too many Literotica stories are lacking even decent dialog.

Dialog was a strong feature of this interesting tale.

It is building and progressing nicely.

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ for each chapter.

Paul in Oklahoma

Captivating story and I don't get anal about grammatical issues like others. However, I do want to say that actions taken by the main character would not rate a VC. The VC is the most difficult medal for heroism to earn in the world. Actions that would rate a Medal of Honor here in the US might not get an "honorable mention" for a VC. It takes a complete disregard for one's personal safety and pain, along with a total dedication to mission and an unheard of level of heroism, to be even considered for the VC. I only mention this so everyone will know and so as not to "water down" the requirements for having such an honor bestowed upon an individual.