All Comments on 'The Break-in Ch. 01'

keep going

A very nice story, so far. I appreciate the absence of sex at this point. Please keep going.

I agree with previous comments about lack of sex so far. Most writers know that the basic rule of any story is interest. You start with a idea and then try to get the reader interested in it. What follows is what the writers want. Thats why you find lots of stories with lots of sex getting bad reviews. As is I am waiting for the next installment of what seems like a good plot.

This will be a great story to watch develop. Hope it gets wild soon.. :)

This has all the makings for a wonderful story. You have my attention. I am looking forward to many more chapters.

Very nice I like stories where you are pulled in so deeply and must say you have a tallent for this please keep going.

i have to say that given the utter tripe i have had the misfortune of read of late. that your is such a welcome sight. the fact that there was no sex in it and only brief glimpses of bare flesh made it even more impressive. as such i look forward to reading the next installment, keep up the good work

Ok...I feel where this is going. The kid he nver knew just tried to bust into his house. This is anything but random, you have to make it seem less setup and more that she had been researching her past on line and found a clue envolving him. Maybe getting his address out of some public file. i.e. a divorse record. Good luck with it. It could be a great romantic story.

I eagerly await more.