All Comments on 'The Bride Ch. 02'

No more stories, do us all a favor.

Waste of time

"Lust overcame reason and I yelled for somebody to fuck "my bride's virgin asshole."

Ed jumped up and said, "Hold the slut down, I'm..."

And he did...all my "friends" took turns fucking her ass...

Jenny looked at me lovingly as she was being fucked ....... as I told her.

"there is will never be a wedding tomorrow or ever after that, you fucking slut. And as for my friends, you can come over and fuck them anytime...."get the picture" hahahahahahahahahahahahhahahhahahhahahah

I should not say, "one of the worst", I should say, "the worst" story I've read this year.

the Ct. Yankee

Yep we all want to marry girls like this. It would make life so much easier. Fuck any and everyone, it really doesnt matter who or why or what. STDs and HIV dont exist, they only say those things to keep us from having fun. Fuck em all baby, I hope ours kids all have different fathers. Right on baby!

fucking horrible never write anything again please.

congrats on your low life writing - you have now reached the lowest substandard pathetic helpless self cuckolding excuse for a human being possible.<P>

You exist only in your sordid mind elsewhere you aren't regarded as human. So again congrats on your achievement so hardly worked for.

At first I could not figure out the haters:

Why read stories you that you end up insulting?

Why spend your time writing a negative, unhelpful criticism when you could be encouraging someone whose stories you like?

Then I realized -- OK, this author is into humiliation, and the "critics" figure he'll enjoy their humiliating comments,

so that their insults will actually encourage him to write more stories...

It's just too much reverse psychology.

This was a loving wives story? All through both chapters I tried to find out who was a wife and there was none. The only woman I could find was a cheating, whoring slut of a bride that humiliated and degraded the groom. Oh, by the way, with a best man like he had, how needs one and who needs to get married to a slut. I guess so his best friend could bang her anytime. She has set a precedence and now she will have to live with it and be known as a slut. Word does get around. Anyway, who would want to marry a slut like her?

Story is okay, but rather than a meaningless gangbang, you could have had your bride-to-be give her virginity to one stud, your rival, while you were made to watch. Draw it out and turn up the heat, etc.

Loved it.

I am right in there with the ones that gave you a zero but not for the same reasons they did. The guy that said there was no wife in this story was right.. there isn't so I don't think that this should be here. There are few of us readers that enjoy reading stories of truly loving wifes so my suggestion is that Literotica makes a classification called "cheating wives and girlfriends" and you could put your discusting story in there and then I wouldn't mistakingly read it thinking I was going to read about a wife that "loves" her man.

I give credit to anyone who spends the time to write for the rest of us. Story was fine. After all, it's for entertainment. Perhaps the jerks who criticize your writting should put a pen in their hands and keep it off their dicks.

What you write is you,gang bang and rape the girl you are going to marry. You limp dick fag you!

very hott

Dont listen to the assholes,You just know its the same silly faggot sitting in his mommys panties reading every single word of these types of stories just so he can complain and act like it didnt make him cum all overhimself,hes just upset cause he knows his ex is out fucking all of his friends because hes a pathetic loser.Dont be in denial you little faggot. Go get your buddys cock hard for her

Can anyone with a dick and balls that isn't stone cold gay like this shit. I mean if you really do like it you have some serious issues, and everyone knows it. this is not for normal stright guys. W.T.F. on top of everything else he wanmted his ass fucked, and this is a good story. Ha Ha Ha Ha Ha.

same boring old crap - author, could you at least have tried to make interesting or migrate some twist into the pathetic effort?

wedding because they both wanted to be virgins...He could have always said "HELL NO" when the minister would ask him the question..."Hell no I don't want to marry the whore skank...then he could pull a machine pistol and killed everyone including the slut...Bang...bang arghhhh aiiiieeee...BANG111 Bang!!! die you mother fucker Ed...Slut ...blood would be all over her white gown and while she would die I would shoot her mom and pop and little sisters...die slut..bitch whore... That's the kind of response you elicit from readers that are fed up with your British wimp, slut fuck suck whore tramp shit humiliation....fuck you asshole writer

I hope the writer never writes again.

It had the making of a great story before the gay and cuckholding shit.

All the stories from this author seem to have this kind of defect. The writing style rocks, the story lines are great at first, then turn ugly.

Straight guys do get off on the taboo of their pure girl being slutty, even if it crosses some lines. But making sure he was the only one not getting any? That castrates him in front of his boys... And don't get me started on the gay shit.

It's a known fact guys are either straight or gay. Most men are at least 95% whatever they are. No desire or tolerance for touching or tasting other guys cum, or handling their wangs. None.

This is clearly a female author, and most women don't understand that they sit more in the middle, regardless of which flavor they're into.

Keep trying. I for one would love your work without the 'cum in mouth' or 'jackin' off dude' or 'castrated cuckholding' stuff.

And FYI: I'm a straight married swinger. Wife b/f is my best friend. Love the guy- but I would never want to play with his willie.

amazing story ! One of the best i have ever had the pleasure of reading.....

keep them cumming....

I gave it 1 star

The ones that keep pointing out the haters. They just can't help themselves.

Great story. She is a keeper.

Rule one. Never marry a virgin.

Rule two never marry a slut unless it's your idea she be a slut.

Be sure to get pictures. Always good for blackmailing sluts.

Should have left her at the alter, shown up with a hooker and handed out pictures to her friends and family of her little slut party then left with the hooker.

The standards of good writing must have been lowered for this guy. Unbelievable.

These cucks can't stand an opposing opinion. It's in their nature to bitch about anybody that doesn't agree with their perverted thoughts and desires. Any comments you perverts. Let us know so we can understand your motives for crying like a little piggy. Oink, Oink.

This writer isn't worth reading. Excuse me while I throw up.

the true closet cuckolds are spooging their keyboards and flaming denials hot and heavy, probably with a dildo in their mouth and beads in their ass, can't wait for Ch.03 so we can see them really flame.

After the guys untied the to be groom he grabbed a baseball bat and knocked them all out. He then had his not-to-be-bride tie them up and had her castrate them, left her naked and took all her cloths. Or he waited to walk out on her at the wedding, letting everyone know what a slut she had become... Overhead projector of her performance playing the video Ed had taken... Something like that would have been a better ending instead of the typical cum crazed wimp closet cuck...

Hot, but the pace was a little fast. I'd have liked a little more buildup, especially at the end with the anal.

Ed had taken photos of Jenny at the party having sex with my so-called friends. I got him to give them to me or loose his balls as he sat tied to a chair. At the wedding I had a projector set up and said I wanted to play a slide show of us together. It started out with us together but then it changed to showing all of Jenny's debauchery at the party. Her mother fainted. Her farther grabbed his chest. Jenny looked mortified. I announced to the crowd no way I'd marry the slut. She fell to her knees crying and cursing. I walked out of the church while my cousin and his buddies grabed Ed and the rest of my ex-friends and beat the crap out of them. Much better ending. BURN THE BITCH.

Cucky's bachelor party should end with his dick and balls sliced off! How the fuck could he get off on watching his alleged friends gangbang the woman who supposedly loves him and who's marrying him the next day?!

- And he wacks them off into her mouth before suggesting that they all fuck her up the ass?! Some sick fucking shit!

- Hopefully,this is all being filmed in living color.That way,the next day at the reception,after Cucky and Slutty are married,dear pal Ed can lower the lights and let everyone sit back and enjoy watching the,"Bachelor Party Gang-bang". It'll be a blast to watch the groom's relatives kick the shit out of Ed and the "friends" as his mother and father puke their guts up. And more fun can be had watching the bride's father have a heart attack,her mother a stoke,and guys approach Slutty waving 20 dollar bills. Fun! Fun! Fun!

- This story is SHIT,SHIT,SHIT!!!!!!!!

What a whimp

It's bad enough that most of us guys haxe a hard time keeping our dick in our pants. I know I have had a few times. But as my past reflects, that our fantacys get us un more situations that we could have avoided.Reading stories like this and a few other senarios have led to some pretty wild tines. Talked my last girlfriend into having sex with other guys. Turned out each of them had a cock bigger than my average size dick. Knew this next situation was a risk but push on and she became wanton of big cocks. She even said it was a turn on for her to get fucked by them.

Omg what a story. Can't keep a hot girl down. xoxoxoxoxo Annette

The cuck needs to cancel the wedding, find himself a new girlfriend,and a new group of friends!

This marriage has no place to go except right down the toilet!

So many opportunities to make this story better. For example, the main guy should have just heard about Gail front Ed, he’s blindfolded while tied to the chair as he encourages ‘Gail’ and she removes the blindfold to reveal her true identity.

A very HOT but fucked up story. ~ Even though he’s a wimp, the dip-shit wised up and realized that there was no way he could marry the slut. It was bad enough what happened at his “bachelor party” but finding out she’d been sucking and fucking his now-former friends could not be justified even in his screwed up head. - He didn’t even bother to let the twat know and left her alone at the alter. She ended up as a 2-bit whore after he transferred to his employer’s offices in Oregon and married a guy named Fred.

I guess all your stories are really this bad. At least the LW whore and the cuck boys like it. No normal human would.

A normal human would not read a story he does not like, as you plainly do so much of.

Good one anonymous bitch. I’ve been living rent free in your otherwise empty head for a long time.

1*

What the CUNT was this? You intellectually constipated fuck!

Well, probably one of the worst stories I ever read. I can't imagine this cuck getting married after what she has been doing for the last few weeks. I would not even give rating for this. Just bad.

This is a fantasy, and in a fantasy anything goes, and anything can be forgiven.

I thought it was hot, and the outrageousness of it helps that.

For those who want to fantasize about the couple’s relationship imploding, go right ahead. That’s not my fantasy though. I choose to believe they make it work. She continues to fuck other guys, and he loves it. And they have a long and happy marriage free to do fucked-up shit.