All Comments on 'The Brownstone: Scott Ch. 04'

I definitely adore your story. This idea of a multiple generations story has a big merit - very much like "The hours" . There are personal stories of fictional characters as well as real history. I think that after some re-editing (there are a few typos, missing words and formatting issues) it really deserves to be published as a book.

But aside from that, this story is absolutely great! If you want "The Brownstone House" to be published in Germany, I'd deem myself happy if I'd be allowed to to translate it (no fees - I love this story too much to demand anything . *ggg*). There are two publisher's houses in Germany who I think might be perhaps interested in publishing the "Brownstone House". First, the Konkursbuch Verlag where I had already a publication and then the the Bruno_Gmünder Verlag) If you're interested- then please contact me.

Great chapter.

I really love these characters

I was disappointed by the visit from the trio. Scott wanted answers to so many questions, yet I feel the information he received was one-sided. I expected Scott to ask as many questions to the submissives as he did to the dom -- *especially* after he realized he was submissive himself.

I thought the visit from richard was interesting, though alot had been covered earlier, it was a good crash course in d/s. One tiny thing that would help is when one person is speaking and the next begins, you are supposed to start a new paragraph. doing this will help b/c once or twice I had to re-read to know who was saying what when Scott replied to Richard in the same paragraph.

Some things about the place M and S are in their relationship and where to go from here....I hope that S will ask for details as to how far into the lifestyle M is. Will he be using subs while they are together? How involved is he in the brownstone. I'd think these would be major questions on S's end. I also think they are overdue for a convo about what they both want from a relationship and one another. M has yet to truly apologize and convince S that he understands why he lost his trust. I'd be interested why he didn't trust S when he had only had a relationship that included trust. it's not like he was burned and was afraid to give his trust to S. It's time for him to ask what he can do to regain that trust, if S can forgive him. I think S will have to really think about whether he wants to explore the brownstone with M. I think that it is good he got the info he did, but I think that he needs to trust M enough to talk to him.

I look foward to them working their issues out. I hope you will go as deeply into their relationship as you did with he and Charles and C and Cecil. That was the strength in the story since you really developed each character and relationship. Keep writing!