All Comments on 'The Cabin'

OooOOoh JP!! Your story is fantastic!! I Like the characters and the storyline. Wonderfully erotic. I'm so glad you wrote this. You are a wonderful writer--thank you for the wonderful read and for starting my day in arousal! xOxOx Burny

another great erotic tale to come from the mind of JP.. keep writing i love it xxxx

I hope you don't lose your muse. I definately want more.

where was the build up? it was a fast stroker, pure and simple. it certainly wasn't romantic.

..enjoyed the story JP. i'm glad you gave me the link to read them all. i'm looking forward to more of your thoughts and imagination. ~ranger~

Contrived, predictable and dukll.

While I would never remove any negative comments due to my strong views on censorship. It is freedom of speech that makes this medium so great, after all can't have everyone kissing your ass all the time. However, let me please state that while a negative comment is welcome and refreshing, at least be kind enough to detail where it should be improved.I'll never learn and grow as a writer if you aren't willing to help.

I'm willing... *laughs* Thanks for the link, I loved your stories hon! ~Leggy

Hey JP, I really enjoyed this story, however you're probably already aware (considering you had already told me that it was not your best work), it does go a little overboard on descriptive word use. I did have a chuckle at how you interlinked your other story into this *grins* will keep on reading *hugs* stellar

Good use of descriptives, spelling and grammar good. I felt her response to his invitation to share the cabin needed more realism. A hesitation, maybe some support form the owner. Suggest you slow down a little, they don't have to jump into bed together before they've known each other 5 minutes. The build up is what enhances the erotica.

shall we share a bed?

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