All Comments on 'The Choosing Ch. 10'

I loved your writing particularly in this chapter. When a story is as good as this, I usually don't even notice the prose, just eagerly pulling out the story, making meaning of the words. But in this chapter it seems you either spent some time making word choices, or your talent and skill are keeping pace with the plot.

I do hope there is a little more explanation into Roth's about face with regard to his chosen. Though I'm glad, his out of character decision is slightly perplexing. That he would stand back and allow her to tether to a boy... needs explaining.

I have enjoyed this story alot. I really am frustrated with these two though. Why can't they just admit their feelings already. Nadar should get over his need to do the right thing and she shouldn't be too proud to tell him he should! Hope you put a good ending to this. Overall, it is very imaginative. Thanks for writing

since I haven't read it yet buuuuut I have to say I love love this story (what I've read so far)

thx for keeping me updated on ur status - I think N's behavior fits hows he's acted throughout the story. Both are leaving each other in doubt of their feelings so their reactions are understandable but I really want to smack N ;)

This chapter is Ms. Sweet at some of her pithy best: "He wanted me as I wanted him. I held the evidence in my hand."

It's those morsels of gratuitous poetry served up while you juggle a full cast and hurdle us through an epic plotline that make me smile and cringe with jealousy at the same time. Well done!

For Grumpy re Roth's motivations: If I were a betting man, I'd say that he still regrets the death of the previous Vessel, whom, as I recall, he cared for deeply. Seems to me it would make sense that he's less than eager to repeat the process with Talia. At least that's when I'm getting out of this from back here in the cheap seats. XP