All Comments on 'The City'

I love it when characters just can't help themselves, and there's certainly no shortage of that here. The backstory and characters are very well established and thought out. There were a couple of repetitive sentences and some typos, but nothing too distracting. This is the first story of yours that I've read, but you can bet anything that it won't be the last.

Hey, I read most of your stories so far and I really enjoyed them but I noticed that you tent to "run" through the sex scenes. Try to make them last. Describe them in greater detail. There are a lot of stories on this site that you can draw on for inspiration. I'm not saying copy - mind you - but try to refine your style. You are certainly already on a good way so far. If you can improve some more you'll be in the top ratings in no time.

Keep it up

Thanks for the comments and advice, much appreciated.

Great story!

I'm very much looking forward to the sequel!

I don't know about everyone else, but I would

like to see some dudes getting some demon action.

Tentacles and demon cocks in their tight, muscular

and formerly-straight-laced bums and gullets.

:-)

Well that was bloody fantastic, nice touch with the aphrodesiac theme as well, its one of my favourites!

Personally, I can't wait until you give Marie the treatment too, there's little better than reading a story of a girl caving in & abandoning her pride for pleasure. Looking forward to the next one a lot!

You're a fantastic writer!! I'm kinda new to the whole literotica thing but this is probably THE best, if not one of them!! :D Would have to agree with the other Anon tho, would be nice if the "defiling" lasted a bit longer ;)

For the sequel. Your work is always top notch, but I can't wait to see what happens next to the five brave (if a little foolish) adventurers as they explore The City.

Honestly, the only issue I have with this story are the occasional typos (e.x. 'planet' instead of 'plant'), but otherwise it's great work! I'd like to see more of the flower in the future, really.

I really enjoyed ur work but frankly when the sequel will come?? I am just dying in anticipation

Concluding parts are in the works - sorry for the delays! Will be finished one day.