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by leigh_cheri

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1Browneyedguy1Browneyedguyabout 10 years ago
Your first story ???

A little too short but still HOT!

I'd also think that there should have been more detail... but MORE please

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
like married sex among strangers

Started too quick and was over quickly too. I thought a good story was building, then wham-bam-thank-you ma'am. Great first effort though. Next time prolong the build up and the sex.

leigh_cherileigh_cheriabout 10 years agoAuthor
From me!

Glad to know there is an appetite on this site for more build-up (which I personally like too!)... the next one will be longer. Thanks for the feedback!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
The author clearly has writing talents

But hot sex in 1500 words? This feels like an etude, not a sonata, or concerto or a symphony.

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