by DreamPisces
As a reader, I was subtly drawn into this story. A common day became extraordinary with the unexpected meeting of Amy and Stevie.
Then the action became more interesting as they caressed and made love. It just seemed to be a natural sequence of events, instead of being contrived.
Good luck in the contest.
Very well written. You are either an experienced writer or a very gifted amateur. Your sense of story is excellent. You have very good pacing. Well done.
I enjoyed your story. This is the first of yours that I have read. I am going to have to take a look at what else you have written. Please don't stop, you do have a talent, don't waste it.
I have never "favorited" a story before this one. You have a gift for description and I hope to read much more from you
I like stories which have a slow build up. Good writing, will be looking for more by you in the future. Thank you for taking the time to write.
I really like what you've done here. You framed the place and the moments so beautifully. Your pacing was good and kept me wanting more. 5 stars from me- Well done!
Wow! Your writing is by far the best I have ever read on literotica. Very professional and with a good flow. Please keep writing!