by Beatnic_jazzman
Chapter after chapter of repetition and all for nothing. What crap.
Oh and if a story needs a list of terms stated and then explained in a list, then it’s a terribly written and expressed story. Also what good is that list of facts at the story end after seven chapters.
I just have to laugh, not at you though, you tried your best.
I recommend writing a story plan/outline and then fleshing it out into a complete story.
I really love this story, too bad it is not longer and extended... thanks for a great read...