All Comments on 'The Duellist'

but I'm glad I found this - well-written and engaging. All the best in the contest Witcher, you deserve to do well!

I loved it, well written and on the edge. I think there should be a conclusion to Jayden's affair with Emma; it's not very clear when or how that ended, since he seems to be with Niamh at the end.

As far as I read, Emma had moved in with Jay. What happened to her when Jay got back with Niamh? That part of the story was left out or what?

You seriously ought to think of expanding this into a screen play. I'd pay to see it

You took me there and kept me there. A stylish and nearly flawless tale with good depth--not much more a reader can ask for. Wonderful job.

I found myself skipping past the sex scenes so I could get on with the narrative, find out what happens to the characters. Not sure that should be a good thing on an erotic literature site, but it sure is proof of a cracking yarn. Nice work.

Very imaginative; love the writing and the characters.

what the hell dude? You don't end a great story like that. The wedding thing in the beginning set up their relationship. It's how stories work. They're pretty much locked in. Now apparently jayden has two chicks or something. You needed to clear that up. It feels lazy. Kinda looks like you intended to make Emma the perso he wound up with then decided you liked niamh more but figuredthat wouldn't be taken well so you just glossed over it. Wim is a weiner. I'm not down with Emma ending up with him.

Other than that great work

Totally engrossing read, loved the scifi and romance--glad he ended up with Niamh and not the rather irritating ex in the end.

I loved this story .One of the best here.

That was the most engrossing story I have ever read on here. Like a freaking movie. I can even understand how he ended up with Niamh after being tempted by the past. Love the world you've created, the character of Jay, everything. No complaints - wonderfully descriptive. Fantastic job. Thanks for posting.

I loved the story, I really did.

However, I have just have that one doubt; what happens to Emma? Do they get together? Or is he still going to screw around with his boss-lady??

Just askin'

Coooome oon more please

Really gladdens me when i find a hidden gem like this amidst those generic space marine and harem scifi type, with the exemption of ripperfish of course.

I am new to the site and this is only the second story I have read, but man oh man am I glad that I did. Great writing and the character development is great. There are a lot of key points that are not directly worked out, but are apparent if you read between the lines. Jayden was a great character - rising from nothing to become a kind of greatness in his world. Maybe a part 2 is in order, something that takes us down the road a bit - say 10-20 years in the future.

Great story, really ratcheted up the tension as it went. Please keep writing.