All Comments on 'The Enchanted Boy Ch. 01'

Interesting start curious what comes next.

A promising start but I'd check to see if you can find volunteer editing on the forums. Sometimes it was hard to now whether you were talking about Rafael or Bain. It was also hard to connect with character motivations at times.

You could probably rewrite this chapter to be twice its length and it would be perfect, actually.

not my thing. i like here and now.? sorry. x x x

love the story

hate dinkyboot's stupid inane comments

It may be a bit of backstory, but you make some intriguing promises. You lay in the promises for a long and compelling story.

The use of present tense is bold. Doing this in the backstory gives it and the reader a feeling of mystery and portends bigger things to come.

Ready to see what's to come.

You got my attention !! More plz !