All Comments on 'The English Twins 01'

Why the drugs? That ruined the rest of your story!

An interesting start can't wait for the next chapter.

why do writers ruin stories with drugs, scandel and killing off the parents. if we wanted to read this trash we could read the paper or watch the news. do all serious erotica readers a favor and delete this trash now. this would have been better in the NONEROTIC area.

Do we really need such ugliness?

about upper-class English twits-of-the-year.

Try writing about everyday reality. Real people, real lives. That might hold some interest for most of us.

Different but still hot. Look forward to pt 2.

With respect, and aside from the writing style - "the way you tell your stories" - which I won't comment upon, I'd recommend some research before you complete a similar one in the future.

If you had researched more fully, you would not have slipped up as you did. Here are two examples.

It's 'Roedean', not 'Rodean'.

It's not possible to study Politics as a single degree subject at Oxford; there are only two joint courses that include the subject: 'History and Politics', and "Philosophy, Politics and Economics'.

Allow that some person such as I might read your stories and already know something about the things you introduce into them. Then, you will begin to understand how that might detract from their reading experience.

Of course, the two examples are not the only ones. But the fun is in finding them. There are a good number but, if you are resident in Britain, you should be able to discover them with a little effort. I encourage you to do so.

Athleets on drugs? Going for olympics? You don't think they would have been kicked of the team a long time ago after their costant failed tests? Keep logic in place. Too many logic faults in this story.

Split clit, torn foreskin?

Drug use? Lovelocked? Meandering dialogue..

How to score, have to read other parts first, then maybe return.

I stopped when the cocaine started. Yuck!