All Comments on 'The Extended Family Ch. 05'

This chapter was a bit short and lacked as much sex, the way of life.haha But, you have an interesting way of introducing your new characters. Group sex can get confusing, so many arms, legs and tits. You seem to have a knack of enjoying one body at a time, or at least concentrating on one while maybe describing what the other is doing. A nice touch. Your drug bill is going to skyrocket now, a nineteen year old? My god man.haha

As an OSU alum, I note that you have the academic schedule off. Spring quarter ends in the second week of June and fall quarter starts about the third week of September. Mel would not be done with finals in May.

You have the rare gift of blending the reality of life together with sensual eroticism into a plausable mix that underlines how positive loving actions can transend violence and personal tragedy. Thank you for your refreshing talent.

my first thought was: Not sure it would fit.

very well written. a lot of fun to read - and very erotic. can't wait for more of Mel!

With karen add to the harem anf then Mel, the writer seems love to pimp their character's friends/relatives out as soon as theiy were introduced.

It make a good build up for a good story become mediocre.

I think he/she can learn a thing or two from biscuithammer' about this.

No sane 19 years old girls will want to jump the bone of her mother's midle age boyfriend that fast unless she is a gold digger with a daddy issue.

Good fiction is believable fiction.