All Comments on 'The First Date'

sorry but the story just lacked something. Action maybe? I am sure you can do better than that sweetie. Give it a good blow.

Nice start to a story of sweet innocence. Keep at it....I'll be curious how it develops!

I agree with the other two comments.

Well... it was kind of short... maybe could have been developed a bit more, with some history and background. But I like your style and the possibilities this story and these characters offer. Looking forward to more. Suggestion: label your submissions as Chapter 1, Chapter 2 etc.

I wish I could meet a nice guy.