by Domwoolf
i like your story the only thing I would do different is explain how the sister got preggers because you said that she got snipped did the doc snip the wrong part
It is not an old Johnny Cash song (he did make a cover of it).
It is an old Kris Kristofferson song. Yes, the guy from Blade.
Sunday Morning Coming Down.
Small insignificant detail is all, in an otherwise nice story.
not real background and no end just a twisted rush to ugly forced sex then a rush to incest. delete and rewrite adding the background slowing down this part and adding a proper end.
Usually I hate women with piercings but in this story I didn't mind. The stroy and characters were great and I loved the twist at the end. I look forward to hearing more.
P.S Nice note at the beginning. Takes some balls for that.
a crazy good story, i love the twist u added at the end, ur good author ill have check out more of ur work