by caligula97236
You might want to check on the differences between:
capital and capitol
anecdote and antidote
fame and notoriety
But well done for inventing a new country, a new language, a new religion and a new philosophy. The sex and the sadomasochism are almost incidental ...
I love the way you wrote this story from the start until this last chapter. I like the description of Jason's life and Cecelia's life over the story. I like how you start off with Jason not having any direction until the end when he had direction and get everything back. I like how you describe Cecelia's life at the beginning of the story and not the end with Jason. I would like to see one more chapter about how they develop their marriage in relationship in time.