by justboycrazy
utter rubbish the grammar was crap my five year old grandson could have written it better than that
Author, you have no writing ability. This is just illiterate. I fear even sampling your other works.
Don't be discouraged by previous comments. I liked your story, it moved along nicely. Keep up the good work.
I liked this story,you put a BBW as the love interest where she gets a sexy guy and has great sex to boot.This story was awesome,please keep writTing.And please ignore all of those garbage comments that were said.They don't know true talent when they read it,and are obviously jealous.