- Loving Wives
- The Gift
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Click here"Is this better then your perfect gift?" She asked. "Oh Yes, Yes it is."
- COMMENTS
Anonymousabout 5 years agoBut not a single husband with a brain shows up at 6pm. There's nothing good that can happen from him using his wife's suggestion for their anniversary gift. He had better damn well have figured it out long ago. Putting that aside and having him go inside there's not a man on the planet that sees what is about to happen that doesn't flee within seconds. Can you say setup for a nightmare finish? Is any man really THAT stupid. So while I thought this was funny, I also thought there was no way in hell this ever happens. Even in a fictional story.
2 stars
Anonymousabout 5 years agoMe, I’d of left that place as-soon-as I could turn and run out the door.
rightbankover 9 years agocoulda been with a little proof reading
shoulda been,
but wasn't quite
Anonymousover 10 years agoHe couldn't recognize his wife doing a strip tease right in front of him??? It's kinda silly.
estragonabout 13 years agoruined by careless writing. If you do not wish to copy edit (as opposed to story edit, that is, refining the storyline, characterization, etc.), get an editor. The clothing the ladies wore was what made the story; careful writing is like fine clothing on the beautiful body that is your story. If the ladies had worn torn cutoffs, dirty sweatshirts and granny underwear, however sexy their bodies might be, the effect would not be the same.
Anonymousabout 13 years agoI found the numerous spelling errors annoying, and switched off completely when I reached "stood their staring like and boy".
It looks as if you've used a spellchecker, but accepted any corrections it offered without thinking.
onlythelonelyloveabout 13 years agoAnd it is just a fantasy after all! I wonder how much that little adventure would have cost to put on!
tranquility99about 13 years agoVery erotic and exciting. Might have made a great episode of the old Showtime series "Red Shoe Diaries."
Yes, it does "fit" the Loving Wives category very well, although I am not one of the many who thinks only this type of story belongs here.
Keep up the great work. Looking forward to reading more of your efforts in the future.
Anonymousabout 13 years agoAn excellent written erotic tale of a married couple. A refreshing change from the humiliating wimpy wife/husband stories that seem to dominate this genre. Good entertainment author. Thank you. ML
