by sauceofallevil
Just discovered this. Wonderful story - well-written, great plot, packed full of emotions and two compelling characters. And incredibly hot.
This "morning after" story was quite well done. Short, but emotionally packed.
Best line?
"That was the good thing about waking up in a hipster's bed - the beverages were guaranteed to be top notch." Second time around for this one, loved it first time savored like dark chocolate the second. One of the best!
Like Anonymous just below, I've come across your recently-posted Gardener, which was so good I had to check out the older stuff. What a discovery! This is great story-telling, great style, great dialogue, and set in England. Love it!
Really glad you wrote something new - gave me a good reason to check out this one. Awesome job! I really enjoyed that :)
I loved the twists and turns, and the outcome. very well done. please write more.
I have read this story several times. I would love more. If not this story, than perhaps another? I adore your writing.
If you were to start posting again, this has potential; maybe not only their story going forward but some of their backstory as well.
Such a great story, beautifully written! Definitely hope you continue the story!
Hannah stays a bit of a mystery, but you can say the two of them are great characters. Probably why people want more. I like it for being a thumbnail sketch of a accidental relationship. Good read.
I really like your story. I can't say for sure if I want to read more. What you gave me lets me put my imagination to work thinking of what might and could happen. Yet, there is another side that wants to hear if it really was meant to be.
Being undecided makes me want to scream... agggghhhh
Haven't we all (or most of us) done a Charlie when we were young and stupid? I remember once in Hong Kong when I was young and stupid and very drunk... or perhaps now I'm so much older and wiser, I prefer not to remember that particular incident. Anyway, do I call you Sauce or Evil? Whatever, this is a brilliant little story and I think most of your readers should thoroughly appreciate it. It finished off very neatly and I don't think it needs another chapter---it's the kind of story where readers can have as much fun making their own minds up about what happens next. I know I've got Charlie and Hannah living happily ever after but then, I'm just an old romantic at heart. Very well done, Saucy Evil.
I don't think Charlie's transition was abrupt cuz most times, when a person is mean just to look tough stuff like this brings those emotions right out, especially when drunk or high
How often we make mistakes but very rarely can we atone for them. Well done!
I really cant believe the change in Charlie, but I'll suspend it, because the story is so cute and yummi.
Real characters, which is always a feat in short fiction. The transition for Charlie from bitch to nice was too abrupt, as another commentor said. But still a well-written, interesting, and hot story.
I especially liked the fact that Hannah had on a mannish suit at the party while Charlie was wearing a feminine dress! It added a butch/femme element that heightened the overall eroticism! Nicely done!
The portrayal of the pov character as a completely self-centered bitch is too off-putting for me to to care what happens to her, and doesn't jive with the single "oh-my-God-I-hurt-someone epiphany that sends her to the croissant shop.
it could lead to the revelation that she was fucking all those guys because she was hiding her lesbian feelings since she was a girl.
Such a good story, I would love to see it continue a bit more. Well done sauceofallevil.
Nice start and am eagerly awaiting the next chapter. I'd love to read more of these two. Thank you!