by True North
Great story. Nice development and plot. It was well written and I saw no errors. The sex was nicely done and seemed realistic... It had good action and realistic human feelings. I think this is a really great story!
While I didn't read the whole story yet I had to comment on one thing. I appreciate the irony of the story but Linus was the one that did the Great Pumpkin thing at Halloween not Charlie Brown.
Now I'll go back and read your effort.
Loved it. One of the more original stories I've read in a long time.
It would have been a bit over the top but if you had a woman at his office named Patty that was constantly teasing him till he starts paying her back by leaving peppermints on her desk, peppermint air fresheners around where she works. that kind of thing.
Very good work.