All Comments on 'The Gypsy'

I'm a softee, a sucker for sweet writing. Provides good balance on an erotic website full of moaning and groping and bodily fluids. I'm suspecting chapter two will have elements of conflict or strife to add spice to the sweetness. You write well with good editing, No distracting errors. A little more background would improve the reader's experience. What business are they in? What is Jordan's baqground; what does he look like. Stuff like that. Five stars. Looking forward to hte next chapter.

"Ya I guess so." Ya is short for you or your, remember that when you write sentences like that.

sweet! eagerly waiting for te next chapter! go on!

Anonymous, in this context "Ya" would stand for yes, not you or your. Its usage is correct.

Chiara, fabulous story- can't wait for chapter two.

You nailed it hon.

Not sure how much *editing* I did, just a few hints or suggestions is all.

But thanks for the reference :)

-Lance

and you left this hanging. Shame? I hope things are OK with you.

I find her interesting for her enthusiasm and freshness. He I haven't figured out yet. OK, he has the right intentions so far and I like that relative to an 18 year old. But beyond that, what merit does he have?

I was quickly headed to Chapter 2 only to discover it never happened. Well chapter 1 was such a nice Romantic story!

I was really getting into this story, and then it ended, don't leave me hanging.

More please.

Nice sweet little tale, really liked it. To bad you never took it further.

What Crusader235 said.... with best wishes to the author.