by JudeWrites
Very good and interesting story had my complete attention right till the end ........ Great job
In this case, the word is semen. Wonderful stuff, don't you know. Kudos for not calling semen "sperm", as so many do. And well done, you kept me engaged throughout.
"You just might have to cut some of my hair while you're here." Would be nice to read about this in the next chapter.
Oh if only my hair dresser were like this. More and more like this please and soon
It's so nice to open a story and get to read an actual plot that builds in a logical sequence and natural manner. The characters are developed so that the reader gets to "know" them and understand the driving forces behind the progression to their lovemaking. The structure of the language in the story is pleasant to read and the lovemaking is described perfectly. There are many "writers" on Literotica who could take a lesson from the manner in which this story is written. Very well done!
I hope you submit more Mature Stories soon. Thanks for sharing the ones you have!!
II appear to be nine years late. Well-written, very good plot, well described characters, and almost perfect dialogue. The sex scene was slow, detailed, and realistic. I really like your writing style and storytelling.