by Sonatatre
A little rushed and in desperate need if a good editor but the story (and premise) is fun and very hot.
Awesome story, love the idea, the flow and the plot line. Looking forward to reading more of your writing. This was very erotic.
you need to get an editor to correct some spelling and grammar...please keep up the good work...george
I usually don't like fantasy, I like more realistic taboo stories, but this was absolutely amazing! It's hot and has good writing, not something you see often. I loved it!
This is the first fantacy erotica I have read. It certanly is a cock pleaser. Interesting imagination you have. I'd write more but my kindle reader isn't easy typing. keep it up, and hard.
I really liked the detail. Keep up the good writing. Keep writing more they have the whole summer.
Wow
I gotta say you're story was fantastic. This definitely has the makings of a great series. I'd personally like the story to ultimately end with Lisa's mother getting triple teamed by the elders. Also maybe you could do a prequel detailing how Eva and Mel met.
Not doing so would bring sadness and disappointment to the entire world. I exagerate, but seriously, I'm anxious to read more.
There are some gramatical errors, though.
I thought it was really good. I definitely want you to continue with this series!
Sonatatre, I've been looking forward to your next series ever since the conclusion of Futanari Club. This new series is off to a fantastic start. Your writing is top-notch, and the sex is so hot!
Awesome story. Very well written both in dialogue and in scenes. Plot was also fantastic and would love to see the next chapter and dive deeper into this magical and wonderful new world. 5/5