All Comments on 'The Hot Tub'

Hi! This is my first submission, please tell me what you think. What would u like to see changed or improved for my next story?

Thanks!!!

~names have been changed

Definitely not the relationship i would want with my Master.

I'm guessing English isn't your first language? The description wasn't great...not much effort into the relationship or story...the story doesn't flow.. :S not the kind of relationship I'd want either

A slave can't go without food or drink, can make them ill, it is a Master's job to care for their slave