All Comments on 'The House'

while the story line has possibilities, the poor spelling has seriously detracted from the otherwise good story. Please, make use of an editor. your confusion of knew and new is just one of the problems.

But you need to work on spelling and punctuation. You used the word know instead of now, new instead of knew etc. You also had a few run-on sentences, some that could have been made clearer with the use of appropriately placed commas, and others that should have been separated into independent sentences. If you can, see if you can find someone to proof read your stories before you submit them.

Great potential, Spelling? Looking forward to more.

This is very poorly written. Your grammar is elementary level. If you can't write properly, you should use an editor.