All Comments on 'The Hunt Ch. 02'

some alpha he is cant even defend himself.you have made an alpha into an omega. he could smell the others or talk to his mate thru the bond he sounds like some kind of pussy and doesnt deserve the rank of alpha.

I didn't really understand the flow from the first chapter to this. Where did the cousin come from? Also, they have been mated for 6months, she can read this thoughts, but he can't communicate with her? Just doesn't really add up.

I apologize for the confusion here. I submitted a revised copy of chapter one which for what ever reason - disappeared from my submission list and never posted. So there's an entire scene which is missing. Not to worry however - I've submitted it again and hopefully it will post in the next few days. As far as my alpha's behavior - I will look at it again - I was trying for honorable - since they are on sacred land and both he and an Onawa mentioned fighting on it was punishable by the elders. As always I love all feedback - good or bad. As a writer I'm always open to suggestions.

DT

I like it, but it is a little confusing. Future chapters will likely smooth things out.

I really hope you will update this. I really enjoyed these two chapters.

I hate half finished stories

Please continue with this!