All Comments on 'The Illicit Proposition Ch. 03B'

You seriously need an editor/proofreader, because you have a lot of errors with extra commas and missing words here and there. Otherwise, I like this story so far. The sex is hot and the premise is plausible.

Two comments. First I am glad to see you wrote Betty as a woman, with a womans pussy and pubic hair, not some tiny little slit shaved bald like a prepubescent teenager as we see so many time on these pages.

Secondly, what an asshole to drive in deep when she asked him to go slow. She should have kicked him in the balls right then. Big dick and a small brain, or at least the small head is doing the thinking.