All Comments on 'The Imperfect Storm Ch. 01'

I really like this story and how it feeds off of your other posts. I hope you plan to continue it soon!

Where do I find this 'Mommy and me Go To the Doctor'? Just curious. Wanna compare (lol)

loved it, excellent writing.

I am enjoying the meta element to your story. I love how you comment on your story in your story. Thank you.

Fiction versus real life, reliable long term ( but is that 'zing gone')girlfriend versus her avid sisters whose staying powers are yet to be determined. Loving the paradoxes. A fine mess of a story *****

Reading this story for the second time and it's as good as the first.

Too slowly for me...

I liked the trope of the parallax story inside of the story. That's a nifty twist. But I don't like the running around behind Whitney's back. Even though they were limiting contact in an effort to respect Whitney, they all three still crossed over the boundary and broke trust. They could have discussed the story with their clothing still on, and then discussed approaching Whitney to discuss solutions for moving forward towards getting intimate. But the mutual masturbation in the same room and texting dirty movies went too far. 😒 There was a better way to approach the problem without the potential for damaging relationships and hurting feelings. 3/5