by TxRad
I was very intertained, amused, and got turned on. Please, i would love more of The Island. You have a way with words. Maj;)
I really liked this story a lot. I always love your writing and this was no exception. Good luck in the contest.
then I'm not either. The description in the beginning about cheeseburgers, beer, and catfishing made me so homesick I could have cried. I loved it, a wonderful story!!
I loved where this story was going, but I was unable to suspend disbelief after a while. Stretch it out a little. Nobody needs to cum five times in two minutes. Get inside the character's heads more. They were primed for mutual explosion. Make it a big one!
This was a nice story and I enjoyed it. Don't take my comment too seriously. This was about to become one of my favorites. Maybe you just stumbled into my pet quirk.
Well written. Not my cuppa tea but it rates a 5 score for what matters. The dialogue is impressive and almost excellent. Reminds me of George V. Higgins, and George was the best.
I was intertained, amused, and got turned on. Please, more of The Island !!!
Great details. Made me think of when I was younger and my family had a boat. Just losing myself on the bay, the wind whipping my hair, watching the fishtail wake. And dreaming about a secluded place. Believable characters and plot. Naughty, but also nice at the same time. Goodluck!
~Luna