All Comments on 'The Jig is Up Ch. 02'

or is the dialogue in this story really lame. No one talks like that. It gets flat out rediculous in some parts. The senarios are equally rediculous.

And one more thing: What the hell kind of name is Dagmar. Especially for a girl. That's been bothering me since I read the first chapter. The only place I have ever heard it before was in Joe vs. the Volcano with Tom Hanks and Meg Ryan. I can only assume you stole it from that movie and if you are that desperate for names there are countless online resources for names that could have given you a much better, and more plausible one.

-S-

The dialogue in this story was completely ridiculous and it made the story unbeleivable and certainly took away any eroticism it may have had in the authors mind. I think the author really needs to get into the characters shoes and find the reality of their situations.. otherwise it will come out as it did, like a 12 year old with a bad mouth wrote it.