All Comments on 'The Job'

I was looking for an editor and decided one of the best ways would be to see if I liked the stories a possible editor wrote. I did like your story very much. Its touching in an unexpected way. There's a change in both charectors.

A sequel would be good.

learning how to appreciate the swallow... mmm

Excellent and well balanced. Enough background info to add depth and colour to the story without being irrelevant. The quality of the writing was excellent, nigh perfect in my view. Nothing stood out as a spelling or grammatical error, and the layout between introducing the girl, Bill, the erotic content, and the end, was also good. The piece flowed into my imagination seamlessly! I'd say you should look into writing longer pieces, and being published even. Oh, and the blow job sounded good too! Well done!

I do think it ended too quickly, but the entire visual was amazing.

Love the tender side of Anne. Great head description.