All Comments on 'The Job Pt. 01'

5* I enjoyed the story and am looking forward to the next installment, for some reason I see them getting married.

Parts 2 through 8 have been uploaded. Not sure why they weren't taking off pending like part 1. I assume there is a queue and I am deep in it.

Thanks for the comment about the following parts, can't wait.

C

i saw this movie back the 90s.julia roberts and richard gere played the leads. i think it was called pretty woman.ever heard of it?

I found it interesting that you described the card game in more detail than the sex. I must admit that I don't share that particular fetish.

That last comment about the cards being described in more detail than the sex made me think. It was an excellent point since it showed what Jayden truly desired. With his money, he can get sex anytime he wants. But it is harder to buy companionship,

Great story so far.

You are the second person to mention that. There is no movie even close to this story. This story is the one I like the least. I wanted to see if I could write in 3rd person, so I did.

If your answer is Pretty Woman (like the earlier reader), you are way off. You should never assume an ending by reading the first few pages. I liked that movie by the way.

I am looking forward to see what Jayden is getting into in Indiana. Good story so far.

I have some ideas where this could be heading, but we'll see.

I hope you end up reading this. I discovered Dream Cloud last week, and am inhaling all his stories. But I know that a story is a team effort by a writer and an editor. I want to thank you for contributing to many hours of enjoyment.

and the title is a big tease.

we know her profession, but nothing about his.

If you're throwing two cards each into the blind, you're starting with six cards...

So if she had a double run, "fives through seven", she'd have had five-five-six-seven...

With the jack, that would give her two fifteens (five-jack twice) and her double run three cards long for a total of only twelve...

She'd have gotten sixteen if she had four-five-five-six and the jack turned up... (Four-five-six twice and five-jack twice as fifteens for eight points each then a double run three cards long)...

But like I said, still liking the story...

This has all the indications as being the beginning of a really great story.

So refreshing to read a story that doesn't start with "She had 38DD breasts or "my nine inch cock". Great writing!

As always, excellent writing. I always pickup more on my second reading. I hope to see some new stories by this interesting writer.

DreamCloud,

You've surprised me again. I'd picked Jayden for a contract killer, possibly on vacation or 'on the job' and found myself wondering if Sandra might be his target. That morphed into imagining that Sandra might have a contract on Jayden. You are such a talented and imaginative writer; kept me going right to the end.

Vastly entertaining and intriguing and always with an unexpected ending.

Thank you so much for your brilliant efforts. I think that Literotica ought to provide a button that would allow us to tip you voluntarily while protecting your anonymity.

You have a beautiful and rich imagination and gifted expression.

Me? I've got a gift with math and science. Reading you is like an exciting vacation for me.

Thanks, again.

Steve Scott.

As usual and excellent story. Reading it again is still enjoyable and fantasizing in his fantasy. Onward to the next chapter!

And of course kudos to the editor, Tim, who our author credits more than himself for this story.

You have got to be kidding me. This is over? It started great!

To wish_, no it's not over, It's a Novella many chapters to go. My second reading and some of it's coming back it was an excellen story a year ago and it's still good today.

Good but it’s always hard to rate a part of a series