All Comments on 'The Ladies and the Master Ch. 01'

The story was lacking in sexual scenes, not necessarily a bad thing if it was meant to be more of a romance. The term master is usually a BDSM use, however not to exclusive to it.

Perhaps "Master" is simply happier as a voyeur, or thrives on punishing himself for something.

He did not deny Angelique, simply said perhaps after the party, yet then changed his mind and went to explore the garden...interestingly enough I am hoping for an additional scene, but of course that would not fit into the same category.

I thought it was a good start, but watch for the spelling mistakes..many times there are uses of "he" instead of "her". It can be a big turn off to the reader. More detail to the sex scenes, the big one was great but still pretty vague. "Diddled" sounds like a term a child would use, perhaps even "played with" or "stroked" or "enjoyed".

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Would be nice to hear how their relationship has developed. Any chance of a followup chapter?

Thanks - great story.