All Comments on 'The Last 24 Hours: Epilogue'

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Landrious:

it's been a great ride and I thank you for the trip. Ronnie W.

An overall fitting end, a bit short, but very good. I have liked this story the whole way. Can't wait to see what you start next.

The problem with finishing a good book is that you may have to wait a long time for the next one by the same author.

Excellant work. Hope you are hard at work on a new story.

Congrats,

Jim

you definitely know how to bring the emotions to the surface, so I hope you continue on with this couple and their new adventures as husband and wife.

Thanks for writing such a wonderful story. I enjoyed the plot and the dialogue, and the sex wasn't too bad either. ;)

Congrats Alex on the wedding and Landrious i loved the story but why stop at Dearly Beloved We would love to find out how he comes out and find out if Beth and Alex has any children .

Pat Murray.

Atlanta,Ga

It would have been so much better if the story had kept going during the wedding.thanks for a great story.

Pat

tale, far too long. The first few chapter were fine. Then I was speedreading the last chapters so I could get to the end. The last part was too unlikely and so unbelievable it did not work for me.

I really enjoyed it. The only thing that stands out is that her bisexuality was never discussed or resolved when her and Alex became a couple.

i really enjoyed it. a bit over the top at times, but excellent non the less. i disagree with the reviewer who thought it was to long, if anything the last chapter could have continued a bit. again a great read, i'll be looking forward to more work by landrius

Alex wasn't the only one to almost hyperventilate at Josh, I started to also after I read that part. Great story altogether and can't wait to read more of your work.

Your story was definitely entertaining, and I guess that's what counts. I did spend a lot of time chuckling, since so much of it reads like a really bad Clive Cussler novel. More help from your editor could have made a difference.

I stayed up overnight and finally finished the story. It was so interesting. I was concerned that Lisa might know of Alex being allergic to alcohol and try to kill him that way or that Alex would accidentilly drink out of Beth's wine glass. These are the two things I thought would end this love story and I am glad they didn't. There were a few bumps in the story line where miss placed words were located, but I got the gist of this love story and dismissed them. Great story line again! I am waiting for the next installments oon Alex and Beth. I have always liked red-heads. I have always like anal (but never did it with a woman). You brought them both together in this story. Thank You very much. Chris

:-) Very entertaining!

I got so involved that I had to read this in one sitting. I hope that you write more.

Thank you for the RIDE and your very productive mind, simply put, the best yet

As I said great story just a little too long

What an intriguing story. The only suggestion I could make would be to have some closure with the ex and the twins. Other than that it was an excellent journey.

The story was great but i dont think im the only one thinking there should he a continuation about the twins. Id love to see them as they mature and have themselves and their mother get through the trauma dealt to them by Dunne and reconnect as friends with Alex

One of the best stories I have read if this was in book form I would have bought it. I agree with some of the other comments there should be closure with the ex and with the twins. KEEP ON WRITING

....you've kept me up 'till 3 AM finishing this damn intriguing story... and I have to work ... well done... It should be easier for such gifted writers to be published.

is like Amen to a corpse, Maybe. TK U MLJ LV NV

I would like for Lisa's psychiatric treatment to be successful and that she cheerfully served her time, she should get prison time but maybe not as much as I thought at first. It would be nice if he had some reconciliation with the twins and they could realize what their mother had done to them. Also how much Betty and George got from the bank as a settlement for the injuries they sustained. And announce Beth's first baby. Inquiring minds want to know, LOL. Yes, I know that it is just a story, a great story, by the way. Thank you for writing. I am still looking for an ending to the "Mall" story with the ex-Marine.

Enjoyed your tale. After a slow start it became exciting. It's a few years old now so I don't expect you read the comments now. It could have done without the anal intercourse. Thanks for a long read. Cheers!

u ain't no web spinner, s w mo hermit or the other few great story tellers.

But you were too long winded. Way too much extraneous stuff. WAY too long. There was a decent story hidden in somewhere. Too bad it got lost.

What happened with the twins? How did they react to the bracelets that Alex gave them?

A very good story that had stroke scenes that went on way too long. If I get bored with the sex scenes I start scanning. I scanned many pages. I try to avoid stories that take a week to read.

JimC

So Alex was bitter that he was abandoned by his parents and basically raised by his grandmother...The twins end up being raised by their grandparents not by their mega millionaire dad. It is critical that he and Beth get custody and begin deprogramming them and rebuilding the relationship he had with them before it is too late. Everyone else is dead or in jail and the grandparents are too old to take on two teenagers. The fact that they are not his bio-kids and they have hurt his feelings? Man up and be a parent! Try to help Lisa as well. Not as a partner but as a victim of rape and brainwashing over 20 years. Maybe when she gets out of prison, she can start a normal life and reunite with her kids.

Long is not necessarily better. This would have been a great story without the repetitious expressions of love and the tiresome sex scenes. As it is it is merely passable.

Landrious,

Ignore the trolls. The story is fine as it is. They are simply injecting their criticisms as a way to overwrite your intent with their need to comment.

Thank you for an enjoyable and well-thought-out story. I thought it was perfect in length and substance.

Dubby49 obviously missed the point of the repetition...that it was an expression of shared devotion. There may be a slight point regarding the number of sex scenes but the audience needs to be considered. The criticism might be more appropriate for a more main-stream audience. For this audience, he's an idiot.

ScorpioJJ is hoping for an epic and is unrealistic. Adding all that he wants would detract from the story that I believe you intended. You can write sequels to elaborate on how the twin's and other side-stories work out. Your own words in the story say it best, "But my daughters, they were another matter altogether. And now they were not even mine." as well as the other scene where Alex is explaining to Josh about his feelings. You can always add words to a story, but Dubby49 is correct to point out that adding too much can detract from the enjoyment. I think it's best to keep to the story you intend. Don't try to be everything to everybody. I think that you walked that line well.

Please consider a separate story about Josh, Joyce and Gayle. I can see Josh as the main character in a similar light to Alex's un-assuming-hero character but I'd love to see how you take on that story-line with Josh's not-quite-there-yet involvement with the Chayns culture and Joyce's more experienced role and how Gayle will fit in as well as Josh's blindness to Joyce's feelings for him. I'd love to see how you play that out.

Also, I'd like to complement you on your editing. This is the first story in a long, long time that I've read that has had so few spelling / grammatical errors that distract a conscientious reader. There are a few errors but they are very few. It has seemed that no one cares any more. Your professionalism makes your work stand out as unique, even against hard-copy authors / publishing houses. I commend you for that.

started scanning, long boring sex scenes. everything was just too "as luck would have it" more juvenile fantasy than dark betrayal story. he didn't actually do anything, it just fortuitously happened for him.

during this story Alex made concerned comments regarding the twins. I was expecting some type positive contact at the end. A loose string.....

Excellent, I would have liked to see both and alex have kids and to see what happened with the twins

1 for this story.

I never got past the second page - it was just too boring and monotonous.

There was way too much effort spent on surroundings or useless information and no where near enough on the two primary characters.

Glad to see some people actually finish off their stories

Well, I read all this. All know super heroes can now retire because Alex and Beth are here. Why was there a "Gag order" on a divorce case? so many things mentioned, never explained, or fitted in.

I enjoyed the tale but I have one issue....why did he have to be a rich,genius architect,martial arts master with a huge dick.....Iean, c'mon...