by carvohi
I like that you have such complex and well thought out characters. It is interesting that the story is going into two different story lines.
I don't know if it was the switching from one main character to the other, or having to stop reading and look up the definition of some of the words the author used, was what caused my problem.
Other than that, the chapter is very intense and having a lot of turmoil going on with the characters.
Thanks
is this american grammar? 'Shawn replied, "Your Doctor Selassie?"; 'I recognize you're dialect'.
"Guantanimo?" I guess author not a reader - pronunciation on tv can't help but be ambiguous, and he/she stumbled into this.
Obviously, no competent editing present. Unfortunate, since there is talent here.